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Did anyone notice that she winced if you raised your arm?
Did anyone notice that her eyes were wide with alarm?
Did anyone notice that she never looked you in the eye?
Did anyone notice that her voice was but a sigh?
Did anyone notice that her skin was always bruised?
Did anyone question whether she might be abused?
Did anyone question why she walked in obvious fear?
Did anyone question why one day she did not appear?
Did anyone recognize her face on the six-o’clock news?
Did anyone see her remains pulled from the river refuse?
Did anyone care that this quiet girl no longer exists?
No. áNo one did. And she will never even be missed.
R.I.P.
Sometimes the invisible is in plain sight.


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Critique by Invader-Chirin Jun 7, 2013, 7:35:30 AM
This shows the problems right in front of our faces that few kids and friends are aware of, even though it happens everyday. I think this- this poem? shows them what's truly happening out in the real world. Abuse needs to be brought to attention and this is the perfect way to do it. Now some deviants will actually try to take a stand against a normally unknown issue. Most people make characters like this and games and tease, but they don't realize it's happening. This, in all it's glory, has made me realize it's not funny or cool. It's real, it's scary, and it's deadly. Thanks for addressing this issue in such a serious manner. I think the impact needs more stars than that but
wow
I'm just blown away by this
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87 out of 87 deviants thought this was fair.

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You chose a hard subject, and the best thing about this piece is that you made it both respectful and accusing. And you managed to keep the over-the-top drama out of this.

I especially like the « quiet » girl part - it's true that we tend to see very few people in a group. And they do say the quiet ones do have their own stories to share.

As for the visual effect, I quite like it: always starting with « did anyone » emphasizes the fact it is an all known situation, more common than we'd like, but all the same never seen soon enough by those who can help. Always the same questions, always the same story, and still, it happens.
I would say you could have work a bit more with the third word of each line ( 5 notice, 3 question and then?) so as to create even more of a pattern or progression.

Overall, a very nice work :)
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unaveragejo3 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Writer
This is so sad. I'll just add her to my collection of fictional characters I've shed a tear for.
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
More than she ever received in life
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ElementGuns12 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I've always wondered how it would be if I didn't exist in this world? What would people do, would I be missed?
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Not something to think about too much ;)
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Prucanon Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this and everything about it, good job! 
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:iconinsanityadjuster:
InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :)
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Manip-Maker Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013
So beautiful, and very close to home for me...
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug:
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Manip-Maker Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
<3
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WhatsThatAgain Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome! You managed to carry some powerful emotions in this short piece of text, keep it up! :)
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :D
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IceCrystall Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I Liked It But It Was Sad
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It is meant to be sad :heart:
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13devilgirl13 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great work, so sad, but at the same time so great.
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :heart:
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13devilgirl13 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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TheKnottedPoet Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
This is amazing and truly impactful. This touches a subject close to my heart. Just...wow
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D :heart:
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TheKnottedPoet Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Student Writer
You are very welcome
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:iconspiritkittyartist330:
*sniff* My best friend was killed because of child abuse
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so sorry :(
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SpiderMilkshake Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
Aaaaah, sssss. This hurts but I kinda like it. An experience I'm glad to say my own life never quite made it to--scary stuff and strongly put.

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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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C4D4V3R0US Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh wow that's amazing
aaaa beautiful
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :D
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anime12violet Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
that gave me the feels
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D thank you
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Homiefox47 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
? :confused:
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xXDangerousPieXx Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Student Interface Designer
I like it. I think it's rather beautiful.
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :heart:
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GothicxNightxOwl Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I liked it. It felt truthful and emotional.
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :heart:
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Glassdefense Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
very deep, sad but beautiful. job well done
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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Glassdefense Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
you are SO welcome :) that really touched me
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Inu333 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is wonderful. Made me cry. <3
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :hug:
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Inu333 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome
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20050235 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
o my gosh, this was beautiful, I loved it
It was sad but true VwV
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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20050235 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
your welcome :D
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KTrKitty Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Student General Artist
this gave me shivers... well done *claps* its brilliant :clap:
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :hug:
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veronicle Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i understand this so well
i understand trying to hide the bruises
i understand lying to your friends about how you got them
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wishing you happiness and healing :heart:
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veronicle Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks but is it possible to heal from that kind of thing
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
From personal experience I can say yes, you can heal, that is not to say you are not scarred forever. But over time the agony fades to a dull pain; at least for some. Best advice: get help, counseling, sometimes even medication, depending on your situation. But most important of all; remember you are not alone.
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veronicle Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
counseling, medication .... the two words i wish i didnt hear.
im always told that
they always say "it will make the frightening images in your head go away".
i hate it when they say i need these things, it sounds like im crazy or unstable. . .
maybe i am well i cant say
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InsanityAdjuster Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh dear! Counseling does not mean that you are CRAZY at ALL!!! Sometimes counseling is joining a support group; finding others who can relate to you so you don't feel so damn alone. Some counselors teach you relaxation methods to help cut down the anxiety; or on occasion, like me, I had some meds to curb the anxiety attacks. Often these are temporary and get a person through the roughest phases. My heart goes out to you, and I meant absolutely no harm with my comments. I just know what it is like to suffer, silent and alone, and it is pure torment. :tighthug:
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